Blog 10

Data 4.1

Global comments:

• Comments are at the beginning of the paper.
• Overview of what the student needs to work on.
• There is a positive note at the beginning.
• The comments are numbered.
• It is not as positive.
• Tells student to "see comments"

Bubble comments:

• Organized
• Positive feedback
• The teacher makes suggestions.
• The comments are more direct than the global comments

Data 4.2

Global comments:

• Towards the end of the paper.
• In paragraph form.
• Not in number form like the first data set.
• Offers help if student needs more revisions to be looked over.
• Gives suggestions to student to choose a theorist to help their argument.

Bubble comments:

• Positive suggestions.
• Makes suggestions on how to make sections stronger.
• The comments are tied to the text.

Data 4.3

Global comments:

• The comments are a the beginning.
• Positive.
• Numbered.
• Tells the students to "review criteria" which is posted right below the numbered comments.

Bubble comments:

• Positive feedback and suggestions
• Asks questions so the student can answer those questions in the text to make the paper stronger.
• The last bubble comment suggests to see criteria again.

Data 4.4

Global comments:

• Comments are at the end of the paper, after the Work Cited page.
• Positive feedback.
• Makes suggestions to the students to be stronger on their focus of the paper.

Bubble comments:

• Makes suggestions on how to make sections stronger.
• Makes suggestions on how to organize the paper better.
• Comments are tied to the text.
• Seems there are more bubble comments in this paper than the other three.

To me, I have always been better when my teachers have made comments at the end of the paper, also comments throughout the paper focusing more specifically on points throughout the paper.  Each Data Sets, bubble comments go throughout the paper but only two sets of global comments are at the beginning of the paper and the other two are at the end of the papers. So according to this, I would make my research question - When it comes to global comments, are they more effective in the beginning of the paper or at the end of paper?  Also another research question that would work - Do bubble comments make concrete suggestions that the student will take those suggestions to make changes? 

There are also patterns that I have noticed within the Data sets and those are that the global comments are either numbered or in paragraph form.  Also, like I have said above, the global comments are either at the beginning of the paper or at the end.  For both global comments and bubble comments, there are positive feedback, makes suggestions on how to make paper stronger, and all comments are tied to the texts.